Post by GraphicAl on Jan 28, 2016 23:10:42 GMT
Before I start this, This is a complete story made by me and only me, It was made with no planning except for a simple idea.
Enjoy my story...
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Hi, I'm Lui, Let me tell you a story.
It seems to me every human being has an initial thought, Like a seed, That spreads throughout them, It may be different for everyone, But its definitely there. Mine was that love doesn't matter, until she walked into the classroom, perfect hair, perfect face, perfect body. I finally understand why everyone went seeking for a person to spend there life with. I mean, she had a perfect smile, she was completely perfect, and I knew I needed to meet her, talk to her. My first day of Junior High, And I already fall for a girl. Used to, I would sleep in class, but with her here, I couldn't. She was like a radiant star, Anyway. Enough. Lets get into this.
"Hey, Lui, See that girl" Drag said in a whisper, "I heard shes from Australia, Moved at the end of the school year last year."
"Drag, Shut up, I'm doing my work." I said back to him.
I have to admit, That was a horrible lie, We weren't even doing anything, But Drag knows me well enough to see I noticed her. She looked right at me, Gave a little smile, And sat to my left.
"Uh, H-Hi." I said.
"Hey." She said back.
More of Drags bull, She wasn't from Australia. But that didn't matter.
"Where ya' from?" I asked her.
"New York. You?" She said.
"Born and raised here in Bakersfield"
"Really? That's cool. Anyway, Wanna hang out later today?"
Wow. This had to be a dream.
"Sure. Sure."
RRRRIIIIIINNNNNNGGG! The whole class piled out. It was the last class of the day of course, and I survived. I walked over to my locker. The first thing I noticed was a note reading 'Aprils Phone Number'. I walked home that day, But the walk wasn't normal. Quite. Then I saw a blur of black, white, and then nothing.
I wasn't sure why, but when I woke up I found my mom sobbing.
I tried to talk, but the words wouldn't come out that day. Everything was really bright.
"Lui. Lui. My poor boy Lui." She said with sobs.
I stood up. Why was I at a church that day? I have no idea. Why was my mom crying that day? I have no idea.
I tried to talk again, Still nothing.
I went to hug her, I felt nothing though. What was going on? Drag, April, Melanie, everyone from my school was here. I turn around and see something horrible, My body... In a casket...
As everyone says their late goodbyes, Aprils last.
"Bye, Lui." She had such a disgusted tone in her voice. "I won't miss you, That's for sure."
"Hey, April!" Drag ran up, " Come on, We're leaving.
"Drag, Be with me. Stay with me." She said softly.
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Feedback. Please. I think the ending was abrupt and I didn't like it much. But, My last stories ending was abrupt also, So I figured it works.
Enjoy my story...
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Hi, I'm Lui, Let me tell you a story.
It seems to me every human being has an initial thought, Like a seed, That spreads throughout them, It may be different for everyone, But its definitely there. Mine was that love doesn't matter, until she walked into the classroom, perfect hair, perfect face, perfect body. I finally understand why everyone went seeking for a person to spend there life with. I mean, she had a perfect smile, she was completely perfect, and I knew I needed to meet her, talk to her. My first day of Junior High, And I already fall for a girl. Used to, I would sleep in class, but with her here, I couldn't. She was like a radiant star, Anyway. Enough. Lets get into this.
"Hey, Lui, See that girl" Drag said in a whisper, "I heard shes from Australia, Moved at the end of the school year last year."
"Drag, Shut up, I'm doing my work." I said back to him.
I have to admit, That was a horrible lie, We weren't even doing anything, But Drag knows me well enough to see I noticed her. She looked right at me, Gave a little smile, And sat to my left.
"Uh, H-Hi." I said.
"Hey." She said back.
More of Drags bull, She wasn't from Australia. But that didn't matter.
"Where ya' from?" I asked her.
"New York. You?" She said.
"Born and raised here in Bakersfield"
"Really? That's cool. Anyway, Wanna hang out later today?"
Wow. This had to be a dream.
"Sure. Sure."
RRRRIIIIIINNNNNNGGG! The whole class piled out. It was the last class of the day of course, and I survived. I walked over to my locker. The first thing I noticed was a note reading 'Aprils Phone Number'. I walked home that day, But the walk wasn't normal. Quite. Then I saw a blur of black, white, and then nothing.
I wasn't sure why, but when I woke up I found my mom sobbing.
I tried to talk, but the words wouldn't come out that day. Everything was really bright.
"Lui. Lui. My poor boy Lui." She said with sobs.
I stood up. Why was I at a church that day? I have no idea. Why was my mom crying that day? I have no idea.
I tried to talk again, Still nothing.
I went to hug her, I felt nothing though. What was going on? Drag, April, Melanie, everyone from my school was here. I turn around and see something horrible, My body... In a casket...
As everyone says their late goodbyes, Aprils last.
"Bye, Lui." She had such a disgusted tone in her voice. "I won't miss you, That's for sure."
"Hey, April!" Drag ran up, " Come on, We're leaving.
"Drag, Be with me. Stay with me." She said softly.
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Feedback. Please. I think the ending was abrupt and I didn't like it much. But, My last stories ending was abrupt also, So I figured it works.